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18. MONIQUE'S POV "Okay, what just happened here?" I look at Desmond's retreating form. He's been acting distant today, but I mean that's what I wanted right? No, I didn't want us to get sexually involved but I didn't want us to stop our little fights either. He wouldn't even answer me. "Sir?" I follow him.Clark steps in front of me. "He's not in a good mood." He search through the small bag under his arm and cards a hotel card to me."Thanks." I take the card and read through it. "What about our luggages?'"You'll pick them at the hotel's reception." He turns to give others their cards.The annoying brunette from earlier on walks up to me. "It's interns like you who should embark on this ridiculous trips.""Excuse you?" She rolls her eyes. "What exactly did you sacrifice to be here? I lost my beauty sleep."I take a good look at her, model hair, model frame. She's really pretty, I can't think of an awful comeback. "It's really people like you that I'm here to supervise."She look
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DESMOND'S POV Good morning Mr Smith? I snap my head in the direction of the door. Monique in pants and sandals with s box. I see she took her time preparing."I'm sorry, but what are you wearing?" Ms Becca asks, she's the most bitchy person on my employees list, and trust me when I say there's a lot. I'm still keeping her because she's highly intelligent and effective. "That's not how you dress to a corporate institute.""We were scheduled to travel today. I had to wear something I'm capable in than playing dress up."Damn! Becca turns to me with pleading eyes waiting for me to do something. Monique turns to me. "I'm sorry for being late Sir.""That's fine." I wave it off like it's unimportant. I don't want to make any nasty comments since she called it quit lady night and being professional now. "Could you kindly fill me in on what I've missed, Mr Smith." Mt Smith? For the second time today. When did Monique become so polite. "I was only giving the team a rundown on everything w
In Bed With My Step-uncle (7, 116.) 119 and 126 needs plot holes check.
You’re right — I missed the mark before. Sorry about that. I’ll fix it now using only what’s already in your chapters (no new plot inventions) and give specific, copy-ready suggestions for every plot hole / flaw I flagged — including plot-specific ending fixes for each chapter you sent (06, 07, 08). Everything below stays inside your story’s facts and beats. Chapter 06 — MONIQUE’S POV (door-stop → close-proximity → trick → punch files) Main problems I found (short) Jane’s grabbing the door knob needs clearer, believable wording (why she physically stops Monique). Why Desmond is in Monique’s office (dark) is fuzzy. Make his reason explicit using lines already present. The “foreheads touch / fingers trail chin” scene reads ambiguous (could be coercive). Tone needs tightening so it reads as tension, not normalized harassment. Emotional flip (from anger to sexual longing) needs a clearer internal beat so readers accept it. Ending is weak — closes on “get banged” line that un
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15. MONIQUE'S POVHe wants to kiss me too. I can see the lust in his eyes. Last night was a mistake we agreed would never happen again. What excuse would we have for tonight.I don't act I wait for him to make the first move. No matter how desperate I am, can't let my vulnerabilities show.I stares at his lips, then his eyes, his eyes are on my lips I impulsively run mu tongue over my button lips wetting it. He bits the sides of his lower lips and my eyes snaps back to them. Our lips are a kiss inch apart, our nose touching. I gulp and press my lips in, slightly shifting back. I can't do this. It's not right.But he leans forward to me. The sound of our heartbeat drumming in my ears. He's gritting his teeth so hard, his jaw strains. Kiss me already, it's just physical, no strings attached, no feelings involved. I almost want to scream at him to pin me against his desk and kiss me senseless. But I hold onto that tiny restrain left. Then I pull away. I'm trembling.He chuckles. "You're
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MONIQUE'S POV I sigh, rubbing my face as I walk out of the boardroom. The new titles and the biggest deal Desmond's mentioning aren't really making sense to me. The only thing I'm thinking about is how to request an advance payment. I can't afford to ask money from Rose again. She would never ask for a repayment, and that's the problem because I'd still feel like a debtor regardless. I don't realize how deeply lost in thoughts I am until I walk past Jane's office without even hearing her call me. Someone tugs fiercely at my arm. I jerk and turn around only to meet those familiar cute eyes. "Monique!" Jane shouts again. "Are you okay? I was calling you." I flash her one of my fake smiles, which only a close friend can see through. "Nothing. I'm excited. In just a few days I got lifted. I may get in before my two-week trial job is over." "You did excellent in there." She shrieks, holding my hands. "I was scared when you got caught." "Yes, the man... uh, Mr. Davids gave me a fri
In Bed With My Step-uncle 125- WEEKEND ORDERS.
DESMOND'S POVI'm about to ask what last night meant to her, but she doesn't let me. She quickly tells me it means nothing. I glance briefly at her. That's great. I don't care. Why's my fist still clenched then? I free my fist. At least now we're on the same page. I won't worry over some potential workplace harassment from her. But the way she's all dressed and weirdly quiet makes me think differently. I fix my hands into my pocket with a smirk. "Fine. We'll see about that." I'll be here till the end. She can't resist this charm for long.But whenever she comes back begging, I'd still reject her because she's Rose's best friend and my employee. Business and pleasure don't mix, and certainly not with someone from my past."It was a mistake." She says her voice low. Is she trying to convince herself? "And it's never going to repeat itself." I complete the statement for her. I glance at her again, I can't seem to keep my eyes to myself, I think it has something to do with how good she
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