Wow, I like the first chapter of the Story. Not bad i continue to read this story. ......
2022-06-30 20:54:51
5
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Nia432
good book , i like the flow of story
2022-06-21 08:21:36
4
0
graciela.castano.l
A good story, needs some editing but overall it’s a nice reading.
2022-09-22 14:35:55
3
1
Dripping Creativity
The story has potential. The storyline is good, but the writing needs to be edited.
It's a bit jumbled and hard to follow the story.
The steamy parts could use some more emotions and a little less how to manual feel.
Keep working on it.
2022-08-02 14:21:06
7
1
Belle Raposa
It, uh, well it needs some proofreading and editing for sure. I guess it has potential, but if the author wasn't such a giant pissbaby about receiving constructive criticism, maybe "having potential" would be enough to give it a decent score. ...♀️