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12.1
I’ve been curious about the feeling of meeting a person who did a violent crime. I thought it’s also how you meet new people in your daily life, but it’s far from that.
My breath hitched as soon as I met his eyes. All my muscles were tight, and I was ready to run, but I was too ready that I can’t move in my spot. I wanted to scream, but the fear lodged down my throat stole my voice, and it only left my mouth to fall open. My breathing became more ragged, and my body continued to tremble uncontrollably while I can’t take my eyes away from him as I wait in fear for his next move.
‘Oh shit, shit, shit…’ my brain chanted with the fear of the unknown.
His silence and lack of response only worsened my anxiety. He looked me over with a scrutinizing gaze, his face still devoid of emotions. I flinched when he clicked his tongue while his eyes turned colder.
My eyes teared up. Other than the immense fear I have, I’m profoundly frustrated that
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