How To Critique A Short Story

Warning : Matured Contents a LGBTQ+ Story, Lesbian Story. -King Shun creates a society for LGBTQ+ members, and a Lesbian who creates her own Slave Harem and love a BDSM sex. Welcome to my story

My father, Benjamin Ward, was bedridden, paralyzed, and unable to move. The AI model he spent his entire life developing—a model powerful enough to cure terminal diseases—had been stolen and published under someone else's name. Humiliated beyond endurance, he suffered a stroke and collapsed. He couldn't speak. He couldn't even write. I swore I'd find the thief who destroyed him. My girlfriend, Maris Dawn, wept and promised to help me uncover the truth. But at a dinner party, when her first love proudly announced that he'd been specially recruited by a national research lab thanks to that very model, she immediately grabbed my arm, whispering, "Don't make a scene. Grayson just wants a good future. Don't ruin his life." Grayson Vale smirked with disdain. "The old man was about to retire anyway. Think of it as recycling waste." My vision went red. I charged at him, ready to make him pay for what he'd done to my father. Maris tripped me before I could reach him. She threw a check for ten million in my face. "Here's for your dad's medical care. Don't be shameless, alright? Grayson is a rising star. You're just a broke grad student. You should learn your place." I tore the check apart, piece by piece. That check could never buy the Dawn family a future in the world of science.

The great prince who acquires immense supernatural powers hopelessly fell in love with his best friend. At the age of five, they swore to be by each others side but fate has other plans for them.

Sebuah perjalanan untuk mencari dan membuka kebenaran masa lalu. Satu demi satu takdir yang lalu telah muncul kembali untuk mengingatkan tentang rasa sakit.Namun di sisi lain, datang pula takdir baru sebagai tempat untuk bersandar dari segala rasa sakit."Cintailah rasa sakit mu, terimalah segala kekuranganmu, karena itu semua adalah alasanmu untuk HIDUP"- The_BlueMoon -

Liam Smith, an orphan, has had a dream for years; to become a star of the ever famous Lotus Pond Entertainment company. However, when he meets the famous and attractive CEO of the company, notorious playboy, Kain Jones, things take an unexpected turn. Kain is unfriendly, rude and even rejects Liam’s wishes of joining the company! Kain is not at all what Liam had expected his childhood star to be like at all! Disappointed, but not put off, Liam refuses to give up on his dreams of becoming a star and vows to do anything to get that chance, including doing whatever Kain demands of him, but just how far is Liam willing to go? "Your fervent, misguided sense of entitlement is stunning," Kain snarls at me. His nose twitches in indignation before a slow, cruel smirk crawls over his lips. He mouths the word 'anything', repeating what I had just said before leaning in and taking my chin into his fingers, brushing my lips with his thumb as he says in a low growl, "why don't you show me...”

This story was about my bitter and sweet love story. My bitter-sweet love story began when I was twelve years old. I had a huge crush on my neighbor, Dean Samaniego. He's tall, handsome, and smart but a little bit aloof, especially to me. He always ignored me though we were just neighbors. After six long years of having a crush on Dean, I finally decided to give up my feelings for him. The fact finally hits on me, that no matter what I did he's not going to like me back. We moved to another city after a tragedy falls on my family. Since then, Dean and I have never met again. But after ten long years, we finally meet each other. He is now a lawyer, a well-known and successful public defender while I'm just a small coffee shop owner. After I met him again I realized that I still liked him a lot, but I found out that he's already engaged to someone else. Is this a second chance that God gave me to pursue Dean again or a second chance for me to feel the heartache that I once was felt before?

Pasvaati. Pusaka Ajaib tersimpan di Tanapura sejak ratusan tahun silam, menunggu kemunculan Sang Pewaris dengan bakat 'Jiwa Murni'. Taja menelusuri jejak tidak asing. Sepenggal mimpi, ingatan yang patah, Sosok Tak Kasat Mata dan Pusaka Legenda, menghimpun teka-teki kehidupan dirinya. Terbentuklah regu Ksatria Pemanah, kemudian bersama-sama mengerahkan 'Senjata Pamungkas' ke angkasa. * * *

It's too cruel to say my destiny is not lucky. Maybe what is right to imply it is my destiny to be unlucky as you are. I introduce Sintia, the only child who was legally adopted as a biological child. For 35 years my life is full of twists and turns, you can say I am a person who is formed from a family that is Brochen Home, my escape is by pursuing hobbies and looking for as many friends as possible. I am more comfortable telling stories and sharing life stories with male friends. This is what makes them all friends but intimate in my life. The reason is simple, because a male friend is smart in keeping secrets and is good at giving positive advice. The story of my life continues to twist, like a beach blade. Whether it is family problems, problems with young friends who often bully, problems with love, work, household and others. I keep trying to find a good way out and I try to be strong and endure all the trials of life. How not to go crazy over it or kill yourself over it all. "True Story" Sintia Novel Series

All her Life She grew up with a word from her dad "Only Good persons are allowed to live" Having an ability to see people's memory after a skin to skin contact, with the other party, she decided to use it in her own way But is her way of using the ability right or wrong He is a proud son of the Miller Family but became a detective to find out the death of his parents How will this two meets And what awaits them in the near future

Isa lang naman ang gusto ni Cathy Xyra Garcia at ito ay si Grey Sanford, ang lalaking kinahuhumalingan niya ngunit sa kasamaang palad, hindi siya mahal nito kaya naman sa sobrang pagmamahal niya sa binata, ginamit niya ang kaniyang kapangyarihan at kinulong ito sa isang kasal. Akala ni Cathy ay ito na ang magiging daan para sa kanilang happy ever after na ending, ngunit siya ay nagkakamali. Dahil sa kasamaang palad, imbis na makatanggap ng pagmamahal, nakatanggap siya ng pang-aabuso mula sa kaniyang asawa. Ngunit dahil mahal niya ito, nanatili parin siya sa piling ng asawa at piniling magpakamartyr. Hanggang kailan siya magtitiis? May pag-asa pa bang mahalin siya ni Grey? abangan....