Story Critique Example

How can a person love someone when your heart is clouded with hatred? How can you see someone's worth when you're blinded with anger? Jeruzah, a sweet and loving kid but when her parents died her life definitely change real quick from an orphan to becoming a wife of the most dangerous man she ever met and fall in love with. But every love story doesn't end with happy ever after without challenges. Can Jeruzah free Makas from hatred? Or Makas will let Jeruzah's worth to be wasted for him to be able to avenge his hatred?

A guy who has a vice unintentionally falls in love with a girl. A girl who changed him to a better version he can be. That was unexpected love. But the guy didn't know that their romance would end there. A tragic happened. He was left alone in a dark world. He goes back to his habit he used to do before. The girl left 10 Promises for him. 10 Promises that would lead the guy to the best path he didn't expect to go. This story is part of a series. Scout International School Series: 1. The Ten Promises 2. The Thirteen Rules

Do you really know Mafia's? La Familia A mafia organization, group of new generation heir and heiresses, lead by the CODWELL'S who came from Royal families from korea. They are friends since they are young, they know each other more than anyone else know them. They work as one, think as one, and fight as one. Some friendship turns into romantic Relationship and some friendship became ruined by Romantic Relationship, And there is also feelings that kept in silence for the sake of friendship. Mafia's Life That's what this story about, exploring their personal life. Their feelings. Their past. It is about knowing them not as mafia, but as the real them.

Being a royalty doesn't give her what she really wanted. Freedom! So she runaway and landed in the Philippines. For the first time she feel loved, but that love has been taken away from her again. Her father wants her back and do her duty as the daughter of one and famous multi billionaire in their country. When she did not obey, a tragic incident happened. And that started her revenge, she promised to avenge her loved that has been taken away from her. And she promise, before her story end. Before they take their last breath. It will be her name their breathing. SAMARA

Aloha Anastacia Belshaw came from a family of wealthy entrepreneurs. Her family is well-known in the business industry, and everyone is looking forward to her managing their business as soon as she inherits it. However, Anastacia's heart belonged to art and writing. She stubbornly insisted on pursuing her dreams to become an artist and author; even though it was against her parents' will. They agreed, however in return, she must be wedded to the son of their long-time business partner in order to continue the legacy and business of their family. And because of their marriage, she began writing a book. A love story that no one knows if it ends with a happy ending.

Hunter is a well-known, hot, handsome, ruthless young businessman that loves to play around. His billionaire business empire is just a bonus why girls keep on chasing him. His domineering aura that stands-out wherever he goes is such a blessing that every man could envy for and leave them dumbfounded. But here comes Atalia. A simple fashion designer. She is a talented lady with a fascinating beauty that can mesmerized any man's heart but she never knew it. Will their unpleasant first encounter will lead to a happy ending story? Or just a start of each other's disaster.

This story is about a forbidden relationship between a student and a teacher. Quiva is a bold and stubborn girl. She loves making out with her monthly favorite guy in school. Ever since her professor came, she never had an easy make out time. He always caught her and always scold her. Her blood boil every time she sees her new professor but she can't deny the fact that he's effing hot! She teased him always, didn't know he'd lose his temper and punished her with pleasure.

"Sebastian Villafuerte, a billionaire playboy, and Isabella Ramirez, a strong-willed woman, are forced into an arranged marriage—one that was never about love. It was a deal to save her family and to tame his reckless ways. They never wanted each other. But after one night changed everything, Isabella found herself falling, and Sebastian—against all odds—began to change. Just when she thought they had a chance, another woman shattered her world, claiming to be pregnant with Sebastian’s child. Broken and betrayed, Isabella walked away… unaware that she, too, was carrying his child. Separated by pain yet bound by fate, their story was far from over."

She, Keira Hell Jane Delfox, who loves trouble and flirting, died and suddenly woke up in an unfamiliar place and saw unfamiliar faces. Keira suddenly became Ace Alex Glacies, the known gay prince of Ice Kingdom. A dream come true, she said. But, will it last eternity? As the former Ace was being bullied at their school that teaches magic, will Keira be able to forgive them? Or not? Does Keice--- pronounced as Kiss--- a lady with boyish and a bit demonic personality, be accepted? Will they finally love the current Ace who was Keira inside? ~ This is work of fiction. Warning: You may encounter Typographical and Grammatical errors. This story is not perdect.

Zein Vergara thought she understood love, until betrayal tore their world apart. After tricking Elio Ashford into signing a divorce agreement, she told him coldly, “I don’t want you anymore.” But he refused to accept defeat, his desperate grip refusing to loosen. Amidst a world of broken promises and silent wars, Zein’s path crosses with the powerful and mysterious Warren Anderson, whose cold gaze warns her that the past isn’t done with her yet. In a story of love, loss, and quiet strength, can she finally break free?