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"Please, don't do this, I have a husband... I am married" Ash begged with her joined hands while walking backward. Tears streamed down her cheeks, blurring her vision. In a snap, his handsome face contorted in distaste and his eyes lost all their warmth. "Not tonight! Tonight you are mine. And ONLY MINE," he paced towards her like a predator. "Michael...Michael..." Ash shouted her husband's name as her back hit the cold wall. He started caressing her cheek with his knuckles. He leaned forward and whispered in her ears "he has sold you to me, for tonight. So, tonight the only name you are allowed to take is mine. And believe me, angel, I'll make sure you scream my name while I'll do things to you that I have been wanting to do with you since the moment I saw you" He said in his raspy voice. He had been imagining this moment since the day he had laid his eyes on her. And finally, he got her. Daniel slammed his bow-shaped hungry lips on her soft plumpy ones just after finishing his sentence. She squeezed her eyes shut letting tears tumble out.

This story was about my bitter and sweet love story. My bitter-sweet love story began when I was twelve years old. I had a huge crush on my neighbor, Dean Samaniego. He's tall, handsome, and smart but a little bit aloof, especially to me. He always ignored me though we were just neighbors. After six long years of having a crush on Dean, I finally decided to give up my feelings for him. The fact finally hits on me, that no matter what I did he's not going to like me back. We moved to another city after a tragedy falls on my family. Since then, Dean and I have never met again. But after ten long years, we finally meet each other. He is now a lawyer, a well-known and successful public defender while I'm just a small coffee shop owner. After I met him again I realized that I still liked him a lot, but I found out that he's already engaged to someone else. Is this a second chance that God gave me to pursue Dean again or a second chance for me to feel the heartache that I once was felt before?

Kisah ini menceritakan kisah cinta sepasang Kekasih berbeda kasta. Kinanti Larasati gadis kampung yang memiliki hubungan asmara dengan murid baru di sekolahnya yang bernamaKinoy Prayoga. pada awalnya hubungan percintaan ini baik-baik saja.penuh keromantisan,hingga membuat orang yang melihat mereka akan bawa perasaan. Namun saat hubungan cinta itu terdengar oleh orang tua Kinoy. hidup kinanti mulai berantakan.orang tua Kinoy sangat membencinya karena miskin. Lalu Kinanti di minta menjauhi Kinoy.tak cuma itu saja,ornag tua Kinoy berencana akan membuat hidup Kinanti sangat menderita. Akankah Kinanti dan Kinoy kembali bersatu? akankah cinta sejati menyatukan mereka?

Fiona Carolina Mendez grew up being the center of attraction. She is the daughter of both politicians and they’ve been very careful with their actions. But when Fiona got pregnant, her parents were disappointed with her and almost despised her. In order for her to save her parents from shame, she left home and hide her child. Four years later, she met Yohan Tanaka, a ruthless playboy and a billionaire who seeks for a hook-up and tried to get in her life without knowing that there would be a twist that could change their lives as they became close to each other.

EVA SAMUEL:- A 20years old University student. She's got round blue eyes and an oval shape face, she's got all the curves in the right place. She promised to keep herself for her future husband only, but unexpectedly she falls in love with a final student. Falling in love is not a bad thing, but what will she do when she finds out she fell for the wrong person? Can her little heart bear all the hurt he'll cause her? FREDERICK RUSSELL:- A final year student at a university and also the only son of Richard Russell, he's the heir to THE RUSSELL EMPIRE. Frederick is a guy with the bad boy vibes, he's 6ft3, has gray eyes and tan skin, he's got strong muscles and Abs. All his life he's being a player, a heartbreaker, he never settles for one. He's forced to get married just to inherit his father's company and vowed to torture his wife. But what will he do when he later discovered that he's in love with the woman he hurt the most? Will she be able to forgive him?

(Completed) After the betrayal of those closest to him, Alpha Caelum Terova vowed vengeance. With a heart consumed by hatred and pain, it holds no space for a mate. But one night, in the midst of a raid, he incidentally saves her.Astraea Kerr is the perfect submissive, the exacting quality he wants from her. But as he draws near her battered soul, he reluctantly bares his and soon finds himself losing an internal battle.On his continuous hunt for the traitor, he uncovers dark secrets from her past. And it leaves him two choices, one of which he may live to regret but for her sake.Love can mend the shattered, but it may demand from him the greatest sacrifice. _____WARNING: CONTAINS MATURE AND SENSITIVE CONTENT, INCLUDING BUT NOT LIMITED TO: VULGAR LANGUAGE, SEX, AND TORTURE. IT'S AS FUCKED UP AS IT GETS. _____BOOK IS CURRENTLY UNDER HEAVY REVISION. _____READ AT YOUR OWN RISK_____ ___Cover Designed By: Jay Bernards Creations

Jasmine never wanted the kind of relationship her parents had, but when her husband cheated on her with his own cousin, ruining her social life and everything she had worked for, she had no choice but to strike a deal with the devil—revenge in exchange for her soul. TRIGGER WARNING: Intended for a mature audience. This story delves into themes of sex, violence, and an obsessive partner. It starts off deceptively vanilla, but quickly takes a dark turn. If you think you’re strong enough to handle it, keep reading. If you are weak-minded, proceed with caution—this may push you past your limits. Only continue if you’re ready to face the unrelenting darkness within.

Sesil terbangun dengan ingatan sebersih kanvas kosong. Menemukan dirinya sebagai tunangan mafia paling ditakuti dengan kekejamannya, Saga Ganuo. Hingga kemudian, perlahan Sesil menyadari bahwa memori yang diberikan Saga bukanlah ingatan yang ia miliki. Ada sesuatu yang besar yang ditutup-tutupi oleh Saga. Namun, kebohongan itu terlambat terbongkar. Saat Sesil berhasil mendapatkan ingatan yang sesungguhnya kembali, ternyata ia sudah jatuh terlalu dalam oleh tipu muslihat dan permainan Saga. Ternyata Saga adalah musuh dari tunangannya, Banyu Dirgantara. Yang memanfatkan dirinya sebagai alat untuk balas dendam. Apakah yang harus Sesil lakukan? Bisakah ia melepaskan diri dari genggaman Saga?

WE'RE BACK! Yes, your favorite cousins are back at it again, but this time it ain't about me. So, buckle up and grab your wine glasses, because it's gonna be crazy! Mina’s POV: Wait a damn minute. Am I in hell? Because if I am, I need to speak to HR. I didn't even get a chance to plead my case, give a reference or something. I'm about to start freaking out because, I'm not a “go to hell” and mean it type of person. I can't do heat for five minutes let alone an eternity. I feel like giving my life to save a baby and a man should have gotten me at least joint visitation six months in heaven and six months in hell. “Mina, are you awake?” I heard the voice quietly say next to my ear. I tried opening my eyes, but it felt like I had sand in them. I decided to try speaking, but only let out something that sounded like a sick animal. "Wait right there let me get you some water.” I heard a voice whisper again. Who the hell is that? I have heard that voice before but couldn't figure out who the hell it was. “! We need to move; they've found us.” The voice came again. Wait, what? Who the hell are they? I tried opening my eyes again, this time I managed to get them open enough to see the figure picking me up bridal style. Then the stranger turned his head to look directly in my eyes and I knew instantly who it was. “Blaze? You gotta be shitting me.” I said, obviously shocked. “Hey, can we join the party? I hope you are serving food because we are famished.” I heard a man say.

Cold, heartless, malicious are just some of the words that can be used to describe Creed Cacciatore. Adopted by a supernatural huntress and turned into a living breathing weapon, Creed gets on the bad side of a powerful warlock and for that, he is cursed to either become a beast and be hunted by his family or fall in love and break the curse by the next full moon. ___________________________________________________ BOOK 1 of the TO LOVE SERIES SEQUEL: TO LOVE A VAMPIRE