How To Critique A Story

" Don't stop!I want to hear you moan for me,scream whatever dirty words come to your mind, that's what I married you for, you are now my slut, your work is to pleasure me and watch me ruin your innocence." ===== Clara Davis was tricked into marrying the son of their business rival, just to honor their patriarch's promise, but on the wedding day a stranger appeared with the picture of a dead person. He forced her into marrying him, with the aim of making her his tool to get revenge on her family. But why will such a wealthy stranger choose to spend the rest of his life with a mentally ill woman? ,How did her family offend such a monster?. Unfortunately for her,she got answers to this question in the most cruel ways she could ever think of. She helplessly watched as he heartlessly stole her innocence and stripped her of every right to dream of a better future. ===== When she thought she has finally melt his frozen heart and couldn't wait to break the news of her pregnancy to him. He returned home one day with his first love. The lady everyone thought was dead suddenly showed up in the arms of her husband , to make matters worse, she was also carrying his child.

Cailen has only one wish. To have a family he could belong to and a home to call his. ***** At thirteen, Cailen had been to different foster homes, each of them returning him for one reason or another. His heart had already taken so much rejection that hopelessness had set in, giving up on himself and shutting down, that even when a family does welcome him and love him, he still has his doubts. When Cailen returns from University to visit his family, he finds himself struggling to keep a secret that he knows will make him lose the only home and family that he has. Will Cailen lose himself? Or will he lose his family?

Layla, once considered a helpless slave and a nobody, gradually rises to be the Emissary between the Living and the dead. Her gifted powers are claimed to be the only thing that would save a dying alpha, the one who has rejected her. Will she succumb to the pain of the rejection and abandon him to death, or will the mate bond prevail over her fury?

Athena's life spirals into chaos after an unintended murder at 16. Rejected by her pack, she seeks redemption in Alpha Damian, a powerful Lycan King. A shocking lineage revelation leads to a choice between two alphas, all while a deadly illness threatens. Love clashes with destiny in a fierce showdown. Can Athena break free from the shadows that bind her, or will secrets seal her fate?

Who could have been imagine getting into a marriage by yourself and got involve to a wedding that isn't yours, became the bride of the famous but dangerous business tycoon name Cassius Donovan. Only a simple vacation that you arrive single and after that your were already married.

Sophie is a twenty two year old girl who was subjected into slavery in her own father's house by her stepmother and her father, she was accused of killing here own mother which she know nothing of. It got to a point where she couldn't bear it anymore, she decided to run away far from them. Unknowing to her that she's going to be sold that day... " Are you going to sell her or not?" The man asked in a cold voice . "But please tell us whom your master is " my stepmother Said. Only then the man removed his sunglasses he has been putting on since I saw him to reveal his red coloured eyes.... It was then Sophie realized her doom.... She was going to be sold, not only that But to a vampire!

Katrina was forced to marry the billionaire Enrico as she felt guilty if his grandmother would have the same case as her mother, who had a heart attack due to her tough rejection to marry a rich man. She agreed to marry Enrico as he promised her that he would annul their marriage once Estela's wish was granted. As the secret marriage between her and Enrico lasted, they felt love for each other. But when she lost his father, she decided to divorce Enrico and chose his fiancée, Darwin, who had no idea of ​​her riddle. She dwelled on her lies, but her heart does not fib that she still loves Enrico. However, Darwin didn't let her go despite the fact he comprehended. And the run-away bride, Joyce, returned to Enrico. What will she do if she's already carrying Enrico's child?

Once upon a time, Aliya's father was at his lowest, and he needed a lift in his business, but the only option he had was to make Aliya get married to his partner's son whom she doesn't even know anything about. Then, weeks later,she got married to Collins against her own wish and under her father's force just to keep his company away from crumbling.

The night I confessed my love to my girlfriend, she wept so hard she could barely breathe. She said she had seen the future, and she wanted to make a promise with me. I asked her why. She only shook her head and said, "I don't remember… all I know is that in the future I regret something terribly. Frank, no matter what happens, you must give me three chances. Will you?" I was deeply in love with Agnes Grey, so I agreed without hesitation. But later, it was as if she had forgotten all about that night—forgotten it when she clung so intimately to her male assistant. Only then did I understand why she'd made me promise that all those years ago. Because the moment I signed my name on the divorce papers, I heard a familiar voice. It was Agnes at nineteen. Through her sobs, she pleaded, "Frank… you promised me, didn't you? You said you'd give me three chances."

“Get up and strip” The unknown man commanded, his deep voice reverberated through the room bringing me out of my ogling phase. I stared on mortified as sudden realization hit me. I’ve just been bought for a one night stand by this unbelievably handsome man, but that means I’ll loose my virginity tonight!. Feeling his piercing gaze at me, I get up to undress but instinctively move towards the counter for a glass to alleviate the burning feeling creeping through my veins. “God damn it!, why won’t it bulge, I’m positive this zipper is determined to ruin my life”. I said underneath my breath as I dare not spare him a glance. I gulped as I summoned courage to meet his fierce gaze and with an almost inaudible tone I pleaded “It won’t bulge, can you help me?” He closed the gap between us with long strides while I subconsciously retreated till I hit the wall, my breathe hitched as he locked my lips. “Pah!” The sound of a slap resounded through the room, My eyes filled with terror as I raised my hands to cover my mouth. What have I done? I asked mentally still stunned at my action. “How dare you!” He roared and I knew I was done for!. What would happen if a legitimate but outcast daughter of one of the prestigious families decides to sell her body for money and unexpectedly gets into a contract marriage with a cold blooded mafia boss? Will their encounter be just a one night stand? Why would the world’s richest and powerful tyrant choose to enter a marriage of convenience? Find out in <<>> Disclaimer: the book cover isn’t mine, credit goes to google