How To Critique A Story

“You are no longer my daughter.” Those were the last words Velara heard before the world she knew shattered. Once heir to the noble Crescent Moon Pack, Velara was destined for power, until one fateful night changed everything. Betrayed by Alpha Damon, the ruthless leader of the Ironclaw Pack and the very male fated to be hers, Velara is cast out for bearing his child. Her title is stripped. Her name, erased. Her future, destroyed. Branded a rogue, Velara chooses exile over shame and raises her son, Kael, hidden from the packs that would hunt them. But as Kael’s powers grow, so do the whispers of something ancient stirring beneath their blood, something divine… and dangerous. When Damon returns, the bond between them reignites with a vengeance. But it is no ordinary bond. Velara discovers she is the last of the Lunar Order, a bloodline chosen to guard the balance between light and darkness. And Kael is not just her son, he is the key to an ancient prophecy that could save or destroy the world. As the Lunar Eclipse approaches, Velara must decide: protect the life she rebuilt, or embrace her legacy and risk everything to stop a rising evil, one that’s been waiting since the beginning of time. In a world of betrayal, prophecy, and forbidden love, Velara must rise, not just as a mother or a mate but as the light the darkness fears.

“Aku bersedia menjadi papa untuk anakmu, tetapi jangan pernah berharap agar aku menganggapmu layaknya seorang istri.” Demi mewujudkan mimpi putranya yang sangat ingin memiliki seorang papa, Lily bersedia melakukan pernikahan kontrak dengan Keenan yang juga kebetulan terdesak untuk mencari seorang istri demi mewarisi perusahaan keluarganya. Perjanjian pun dilakukan di mana hubungan keduanya akan terlihat harmonis hanya di depan sang anak saja. Namun, mereka tak bisa menolak takdir yang telah menumbuhkan perasaan tak biasa. Sayangnya kemunculan sosok masa lalu juga tidak bisa dielakkan. Membuat keduanya berat untuk melangkah lebih jauh lagi. Akankah Lily dan Keenan akan tetap bersama? Ataukah masing-masing memilih menyerah saat tak ada lagi alasan untuk bertahan?

Beautiful but poor Klara Santos hasn't had much luck in her life, but circumstances lead her to meet rich and handsome Logan Falcon at the exclusive club she works in. Charm by her, the two begin a relationship of opposites. ___ Orphaned at a young age, 19-year-old Klara Santos has relied on the goodness of others to get ahead in life. With her fierce will and drive to succeed, Klara is finally on the path to a way out of her impoverished life. While studying, she takes a job as a waitress at an exclusive club where she meets handsome CEO Logan Falcon who is immediately taken by her. When he finds out about her situation, Logan extends an offer that will allow her to focus fully on her studies and the two eventually fall for each other. However, Logan's father is unhappy with the union and does all in his power to keep them apart. Money, illness, and misunderstandings all stand in Logan and Klara's path to their happily ever after. With their love put to the test, will they be able to overcome all their obstacles?

"You found me as a kid. Now let my adult self grow old with you..." --------------------------------------------- "We'll marry as soon as we meet again." "Pwomise?" The little girl held out her pinky finger. The boy entwined his own pinky finger with hers and kissed her lips shyly. "Promise." -------------------------------------------- Two successful people with their equally giant egos... Will they be able to keep their pride aside and fulfill the promises they had made to each other? Or will their promises be burnt by their blazing pride? 26 year old Evelyn White is what you would call a perfect 10. Beautiful, confident, successful and with a mysterious air surrounding her, she is the one most would kill for. Despite her young age, she is the CEO of a famous multimillionaire company built all by herself. Everyone is intrigued by her but no one has been able to get close enough to unravel her mystery. Until he came along. Meet Adrian Stone. The youngest billionaire. The most eligible bachelor. He is cold and ruthless to the world but has a soft corner for the beautiful Ms. White. He is content with admiring her from afar until fate brings them together as business partners. Now that he's back, he's intent on fulfilling the promise he made to her long time ago and make her do the same. Both of them being equally powerful magnets, watch as their hearts get attached and prides get clashed. Which one would win?

Aemon Cooper was facing a huge problem of finding a bride to marry in order to keep the power and the rank he has in the Mafia world. There was Lily David who was mourning after the death of his father and now, she was being controlled by her family. After Aemon met her at the funeral, he knew his problem was solved as he had already found his bride. Lily had no choice but to marry him. But, what would they do if they soon find out that the death of Lily's father was all because of Aemon Cooper—the man she married. How would she run away after being tied to a Mafia Boss?

Alessio De Luca has always known his fate….to marry, to lead, to obey. As the heir to one of the most powerful mafia families, his life is not his own. So when his father arranges his marriage to Isabella Montoya, the daughter of a ruthless cartel leader, he doesn’t resist. A deal is a deal. Until he meets her brother. Rafael Montoya is a man carved from shadows and blood. Feared by his enemies, obeyed without question, he is the devil in disguise. Ruthless, untouchable, and completely indifferent until Alessio walks into his world and shatters his carefully built walls. One stolen night. A dangerous mistake. A fire that refuses to die. Now, their families are on the brink of war, and Alessio and Rafael are trapped between duty and a desire that could destroy them both. Because in their world, love is the most dangerous gamble of all. And once you make a deal with the devil, there’s no turning back.

Amber Cole is a 31-year-old stripper. With her prime years in the industry slipping away, she’s aware that soon her looks will no longer be enough to make the money she needs to survive. Struggling with her self-worth and looking for a way out, Amber’s world is about to be upended when she meets Ryan Carter, a cold, successful businessman from Chicago. Ryan, reeling from his fiancée's betrayal, is forced into a bizarre deal by a clause in his late grandfather’s will: he must marry and stay married for one year. When his best friend, Tom, suggests he hire a stripper to pretend to be his fiancée, Ryan reluctantly agrees. He picks Amber, offering her $500,000 for her time. Unaware of the deep complexities of her own emotions, Amber agrees, seeing the money as her ticket to a fresh start. Despite their differences — Ryan's polished world of wealth and Amber's gritty, down-to-earth life — they are drawn into a tense, fiery dynamic that forces both to confront their prejudices and assumptions. Amber start their arrangement, initially unaware of the emotional journey she’s about to embark on. As she undergoes a transformation, both physically and emotionally, Ryan begins to question his initial perception of her, discovering that beneath her tough exterior, Amber is more than just a stripper. As the months pass, their relationship evolves from contractual obligation to something far more complicated. Sparks fly, but so do their insecurities. Amber finds herself falling for Ryan, but can she ever be the woman he needs her to be? And can Ryan truly let go of his past and embrace the real, messy woman Amber has become?

What would you do if you get a second chance at life? Would you correct the mistakes you made all along? Would you have chosen a different path? Anastasia Kimberly, the heir to the renowned Kimberly Enterprises, got a second chance at life after being brutally murdered by the people she had loved. Now, she's not only on a path of retribution but also making herself powerful and renowned in the industry. She's head strong and doesn't believe in love anymore. What will happen when Hades Shaw, a cold and ruthless businessman becomes infatuated with her? Embark on Anastasia's journey to love and retribution.

In other to save her pack from a ruthless alpha, she was forced to become his slave. She faced nothing but torture, and hatred from her master. she was used as a stake to end a war filled with brutality. But unknown to her, that she was going to change the fate of her pack.

When "the scentless" Elena thought she would be laid off by her manager, she never expected her new billionaire boss to be her high school crush Charles....Manager: "Sir, I think there's been a mistake. How is she staying? And I'm not? This isn't right.""You're right," Charles said, leaning forward over the table. "I'm sorry Elena. I forgot to mention you aren't going to be working here either."Manager's face set into a smug smirk."You'll be joining my team."There was a simultaneous gasp around the room.