Story Critique Example

Si Lou Wisesun ay may kakayahan na makita ang future marriage ng isang tao. Kaya nitong tuklasin ang buong pangalan ng taong mapapangasawa mo at taon kung kailan mismo kayo maikakasal. Handa ka bang magbayad para makilala si “The One”? Ngunit anong gagawin mo kung nakita sa’yo na ikakasal ka sa isang mahirap na farmer? Sa isang lalaki na may limang kapatid at walang ibang ginawa ang buong pamilya niya kundi ang magtanim ng palay sa kanilang bukiran. Kaya mo nga bang baguhin ang takbo ng tadhana mo? This is the story of Onalisa Gwen. She has a mission. A mission to stop marrying her future Husband in order to protect her family reputation.

Kimberly Samson Isang Nobody . Akala Ng lahat Isa lang siya'ng walang paki alam sa mundong ibabaw. Will, yes. she does like that, but. Not untill Trevor Suarez appear in the picture. Paano nga ba Niya i-iwasan Ang isang drop dead gorgeous na lalaki? Na alam Niya sa sarili Niya na malalim na Ang napasok Nito sa puso Niya'ng inalagaan Niya Ng ilang taon. ___ This is a work of fictions, Names, Characters, Business, Places, Events and incidents are either the products of the Author's playfull imagination or used in fictitious manner, any resemblance to the actual Persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental. Do not publish or transmit, modify, display or create derivative worksnor exploit the content of this story in any way please obtain permission.

Sa lahat ng school, may maituturing na Campus curshes, Queen Bee, Ice Princess and Mr & Ms. Popular. Sikat na sikat ang pangalan na Cassandra Monteralba sa isang University sa Maynila hindi lamang dahil sa ganda o talino niyang taglay kundi dahil sa pagiging malamig, supalda, mataray at walang kinikilingan na kahit sino, kaya binansagan itong Ice Princess Pero kahit gaano kataas at lamig ng pader na matagal ng naitayo ni Cassandra ay walang hirap itong binasag at nilusaw ng isang masiyahin, malambing at hindi susuko na si Aubree Gonzales. Magagawa nga bang mapaibig at mapainit ni Aubree ang nagyeyelong puso ni Cassandra? Don't steal my story, this is my original.

In a bustling city, many were shocked by the deaths of four entrepreneurs, including a business magnate. The victims were found in their gruesome death. One of the suspects is a female victim of their sexual abuse. The search for the suspect became more intense when the police chief's only son suffering from hypersexuality disorder was also brutally killed by the slayer. The officer did not stop searching for the murderer, he ordered to catch her, dead or alive! But police were puzzled, the killer leaves a bloodstain-shaped lip at every murder scene. Investigators were very eager to investigate the case. They began to doubt the character of a timid saleswoman in the cafeteria. Police were confused, the woman disappears every time she menstruates. Is her menstruation related to the murder of sex criminals? Who is the real killer? Catch the twist in this detective story!

My father never believed me when I told him my stepmother and half-sister abused me every day. And all I wanted was to make him love me to the point I married the man he wanted for me... But for what cost? The superstar, Liliana Roxy, drugged me and I was accused of cheating. My mother-in-law killed my grandfather-in-law and I became the suspect. My husband hunted me as my father killed me out of shame. I was given a second chance and return to the day of my wedding. "I want a divorce! Give me my freedom back!" "You married a Machito, you die as a Machito." _______ [Update: 1 to 2 chapters a week] [Book Cover Artist: KircheLeaf] _______ Be Updated in FB: https://m.facebook.com/missfeuille ~Original Book Cover ~Original story ~All Rights Reserved

CONTENT WARNING: This story contains mature/adult content, violence, swears or curses, murder, and disturbing scenes. He has power and he rules people. Ludwick Dargan has nothing to lose. Bilang panganay sa limang magkakapatid, walang ibang role sa kaniyang buhay si Ludwick kung hindi ang maging perpekto—perpektong anak at public servant. At para manatiling perpekto sa mata ng pamilya at nasasakupan, gagawin niya ang lahat para mapanatili ang paghanga ng karamihan, kabilang na doon ang pagtago sa kaniyang kasintahang si Sadie. Pero isa lang si Sadie sa mga itinatago niya. Sa likod ng napakaguwapo niyang mukha at napakabangong pangalan ay ang ilan pang sekretong walang sino man ang puwedeng makaalam.

W A R N I N G🔞 (This story is not suitable for young readers!) Izaac Kurt Moscow never asked to be CEO of the Moscow Company. But when his parents handed him the reins, saying no wasn't an option. Cold, commanding, and dangerously handsome, he's earned a reputation among employees as the beast of the boardroom - a boss to fear, not to love. Women are just fleeting distractions to him, nothing more than a game. Until her. His new secretary is trouble wrapped in curves and confidence - sexy, seductive, and utterly off-limits. Yet the way she looks at him, the way her perfume lingers in the air, makes resisting her impossible. Now, every glance, every brush of her hand, tests the limits of his control. How long can the beast deny the one woman who makes him feel alive?

Del Rio Siblings 3: Andrea Mikaela S. Del Rio WARNING: (R-18+). This story contains strong language and scenes of explicit violence. Also, this is a work of fiction. Any resemblance to actual person, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental. TEASER: Dra. Andrea Mikaela Del Rio, the bossy, cold-hearted General surgeon. She lived a peaceful life until a major crisis struck her family's company. Overwhelmed by the situation, she became intoxicated and had an encounter with a man named Theon Logan, the man who captured her cold heart. Andrea wants to trap him into marriage and she succeeded and they got married. Sa pagsasama nilang dalawa ay saka naman niya natuklasan ang tunay na pagkatao ng asawa na sobrang ikinadurog ng puso niya. Will she ever forgive him? Will Theon mend Andrea's broken heart?

"Don't let curiosity will lead you to death." She's Eleastien Hemlock, nineteen years of age. A second-year college student at Reykville University. She's living with her mother with a simple life. Not until she met this intimidating, arrogant, sophisticated, white-hair woman. Aareah. She asks Eleastein to pretend like her. To cut the story short, Eleastein will be living in the vampire world where vampires really exist. She thought it will be simple so she agrees but everything changes when fate is twisted. It was like she wants to live there and never come back. Lahat ng nakilala niya doon ay napamahal na sa kanya. Sa pagbabalik ni Aareah akala niya doon na matatapos. Hindi pa pala. Dahil sa lugar na iyon na hindi niya inakala na totoo, doon pala niya malalaman ang buo niyang pagkatao.

This story is written in Tagalog-English/Warning: Mature Content Storm Katana Gayhardt is an arrogant but skilled double agent. She worked for the government and was assigned a mission to spy on the domineering and ruthless mafia boss, Traze Magnus Sullivan. To succeed on her mission, she signed a not-so-ordinary master and slave contract with Traze, which she didn't take seriously at first. She has no idea what she's gotten herself into, at least not until Math discovers what she's been up to behind his back. Enraged, he apprehends Storm, who's trying to escape him after the betrayal she committed. As she entered the abyss of his life, she was warned to brace herself for the worst. But she didn't expect anything worse than what she had imagined—and that's when she started to feel something for her master, worst it was not part of the contract.