Story Critique Example

A substitute wife. That's the role of Heaven Arsenal in Ziyo Arkinus's life. A billionaire and the CEO of an empire, but because of the tragedy, she became his unwanted wife. Her twin sister, Hope, Ziyo's fiancee, died, and she was forced to take Hope's place. She needs to marry Ziyo to save their dying business. Ever since they were children, she has secretly loved Ziyo, but Ziyo loves her twin sister. She tried to do everything to win Ziyo's heart, but the world wasn't on her side because whatever she'd do, she couldn't get Ziyo's heart. She was blamed for Hope's accident. She tried to be a good daughter, a good wife, but whatever she did, she was always unwanted. A miracle happened because Ziyo told her he already loved her and they would try to make their marriage work, but hope is back in Ziyo's life and Ziyo seems to still love Hope. Would their story end in a happy ending?

Hanggang saan nga ba ang kaya mong gawin para sa iyong minamahal? _ Paano nga ba niya paiibigin ang isang taong mayroon nang ibang minamahal? Isang hamon iyon sa puso ni Aleyha, sabi nga nila walang pusong bato sa matiyaga kung umibig. Kaya handang gawin ni Aleyha ang lahat makuha lang ang puso ni Ivo Sebastian. Dahil kailangang umibig ito sa kanya kahit may Althea Mauricio pa sa pagitan nilang dalawa. Sisiguraduhin niyang sa huli sa kanya magpapatali si Ivo at siya ang iibigin nito. Dahil siya ang mas karapat-dapat sa puso at pagmamahal ni Ivo. _ Ngunit karapat-dapat nga ba talaga siya sa puso ng binatang bilyonaryo, hindi ba isa siyang babaing naninira ng relasyon at pumapasok sa pagitan ng dalawang pusong nagmamahalan? ***** 06-06-25 Story Written By: LadyGem25

Luna Amaranthine Halcyon, the queen of Spain lost everything she have because of the people that wanted to detrone the king. She survived but she lost all her memories. She found another home from the people who saved her. Little did she know, the one who saved her was also the one who planned to kill her. And now, they are using her to dethrone the king. King Alexander have no intentions to even lay his eyes at Luna. He even ordered her to hide her face using a veil. Little did he know, the woman whom he despised is also the same woman he wish it was alive. Will Alexander find out the truth? Will the memories of Luna returned? Either of the two, Luna made a vow that she will be the reason for Alexander's downfall. ************ This is a work of fiction. The places, businesses and events mentioned in the story are only used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead or actual events are purely coincidental. All rights reserved 2022. PLAGIARISM IS A CRIME.

Disclaimer:THIS STORY IS PURELY WORK OF FICTION. ALL CHARACTERS, NAMES, PLACE OR EVENTS MENTIONED IN THE STORY ARE USED FICTITIOUSLY, PLEASE DON'T ASSOCIATE THE CHARACTER TO THE ACTUAL PORTRAYER. >>> Naglalakad ako ng may marinig akong ingay sa bandang kusina. Nung una benaliwala ko lang yun pero ng may narinig ako iyak ng batang babae ay agad ko tinungo ang kusina dahil alam ko kung sino yung batang babae umiiyak. Pagdating ko ng kusina nakita ko umiiyak ang kapatid ko at bukod dun nakita ko rin na pinapagalitan s'ya ni Beatrice. Agad ko naman nilapitan ang kapatid ko para tanongin kung bakit s'ya umiiyak. "Yana anong ngyari? bakit ka umiiyak?" nagaalala tanong ko. Pinunsan nito ang mga pisnge n'ya bago ako sagutin. "A-Ate ako po kasi sinisisi ni ate Beatrice na kumuha ng necklace n'ya kahit hindi naman po talaga ako ang kumuha." sagot nito sa tanong ko habang umiiyak. "At talagang masisinungaling kapa bata ka! eh! Ikaw lang naman ang pumasok sa kwarto ko bago mawala yung necklace ko!" asik ni Beatrice sa kapatid ko. Hindi ko maiwasang hindi s'ya patulan sa pagbibintang n'ya sa kapatid ko. Alam ko hindi magagawa ng kapatid ko ang binibintang n'ya dahil hindi ko ganon pinalaki ang kapatid ko. "Ano ba Beatrice? Bakit mo naman pinagbibintangan yung kapatid ko? Eh wala ka naman ebendinsya na s'ya ang kumuha ng necklace mo!" sabi ko sa galit na tuno. Pagak itong tumawa bago muling nagsalita. "AT TALAGA KINAKAMPIHAN MO PA YANG KAPATID MO MAGNANAKAW" asik nito sa akin at sa kapatid ko. "Opss! Nakalimutan ko palang anak kayo ng mga magnanakaw! Mga mukang pera! gold digger!" sambit nito sa mapangasar na tuno. Sa puntong yun hindi ko na napigilan ang galit ko. Idamay na n'ya ang lahat wag lang ang kapatid ko at lalong-lalo na

AN EROTIC ROMANCE NOVEL. READ RESPONSIBLY. STORY CONTAINS MATURE CONTENT. Grayson Andrade suffered so much from the betrayal of his fiancee. Dahil sa sakit, poot at pandidiri sa dating nobya, malaki ang naging epekto nito sa kanyang katawan; hindi na magawang tumigas pa ng kanyang pagkalalaki! It brought shame and disgrace to him, and as a man who was once worshiped and adored by women, he finds it hard to accept his condition. He tried everything to cure his erectile dysfunction but to no avail. Pero nang makilala niya ang isa sa mga katulong sa mansyon ng kanyang yumaong ama na si Olivia ay bigla na lamang tumayo ang pagkalalaki niya at pagkatigas-tigas pa nito. Gagawin ni Grayson ang lahat mapapayag niya lamang ang dalaga na tulongan siya nitong gumaling sapagka't si Olivia lamang ang may kakayahang patigasin ang kanyang nagtatampong pagkalalaki.

Warning ⚠️ This story is not suitable for young readers. Reader discretion is advised. Betrayal made her a thief. Desperation made her a liar. Vengeance turned her into a weapon. Shivani Sinclair became Red, a ghost in the underground art world—until a secret agent caught her and turned her into something deadlier. Now, she hunts criminals who hide behind wealth and power. Her next target? An art dealer smuggling drugs. But then he appears. Azrael Nikolai Mordecai is a man who takes what he wants—women, power, control—but none of it excites him anymore. He’s drowning in apathy—until he sees her. Dressed in blood-red leather, she is sin-wrapped in a woman's body. One look and she shatters his world. She needs to stay hidden. He wants to own her. She kisses him to escape. He vows she’ll never run again. Now, the hunter has become the hunted. And in this game, obsession is far more dangerous than love.

The story follows a person transported to another world as a dwarf named Karma. While living a quiet life in this new realm, Karma encounters Freya, a succubus Demon Lord, who commands him to undertake a seemingly impossible task: assist her in completing her mission in this world. Freya presents Karma with a stark choice—ascend the Sky Tower of Doom to kill her or remain in the tower and love her for eternity. As Karma grapples with this dilemma, he meets Mirai, the world’s hero, who is desperately hunting him to obtain the Black Crystal embedded in his body. Mirai pleads with Karma to sacrifice his life for the sake of humanity and her mission on this planet. However, when Karma refuses, she offers an alternative: she’ll stop attacking him if he agrees to join her and live peacefully in the city of humans. Caught between the conflicting demands and missions imposed by the goddess on both the Demon Lord and the hero, Karma is thrust into a chaotic, nerve-wracking, and relentless adventure that upends his tranquil existence, forever altering his peaceful life.

After being left alone, Agent Hana Alijo became ruthless, aloof and unfriendly, she doesn't want to be attached... not until a charismatic and handsome multi-billionaire Clay Smith came and turned her life upside down. *** Hana Alijo A.K.A Lilium is a secret agent from Equilibrium Organization. She is known in her organization as hot and deadly. She's strong and persistent not until she became a personal bodyguard of Clay Smith. The man dared and made her knees weak, made her body numb with no exception. Lilium became coward and helpless when he's around. He tortured her mind and as well as her heart. What she thought was a simple duty turned out to be a complex and dangerous one. How can she fight it when her heart is at stake? The Hana who doesn't want to be with anyone seems to have become vague. She's doomed! Disclaimer: This story is written in combination of Tagalog and English Cover designed by Sheryl S.|SBS

TUCKER GELLER / SNOW ANTONIO STORY A Doctor. A businessman. A multi-billionaire. At syempre, binansagan ding babaero. Sino ba ang hindi mahuhumaling sa isang napakaguwapong Geller. Sa kan'yang kulay berdeng mga mata, talaga naman, bibigay ang kababaihan. Hindi basta-basta ang mga babaeng nagkakgusto sa doctor na ito, dahil mga mayayaman ito. Pero sino ba ako para mapansin niya. Ni wala nga ako sa kalingkingan ng mga babaeng pumipila kay Doc.Geller. Isang nursing student lang ako. Kapos pa nga lagi sa pang-araw-araw namin ng ate ko. Pero aaminin ko sa aking sarili, sobrang ambisyosa ako. Nangangarap makabingwit ng isang mayaman. Hanggang gumawa ako ng paraan na akitin si Doc.Tucker Geller kahit alam kong ako pa rin ang talo. Dahil bumalik ang babaeng nagmamay-ari sa guwapong bilyonaryo.

Underground Romance Series #2: Mikael Louise Wingston "l don't mind being a sinner just to have you." A/n: This story's content is not suitable for 18 year olds below, please skip this book. Mikael Louise Wingston is a police officer who hates being in relationships but likes to fuck women. When he meets a girl named Mari Elliyian San Diego, "Mariane" for short, a married woman who has been physically abused by her cheating husband, Mari is eager to get justice and be freed by her husband; all he could think of was having her. Will Mari believe what Mr. Wingston said at that moment? "I don't mind being a sinner just to have you." And would she accept Mr. Wingston's offer, who is willing to give her justice and free her, but in return she needs to have an underground romance with him while waiting for the divorce papers, or she will just run away to keep her distance because of a sinful affair they might commit. ~Abangan~