Story Critique Example

“What’s wrong, Jane, can you not feel me?” Ethan demands, slɑmming his into mine so I feel sure he’ll leave a bruise. “Am I not giving you hard enough?” Still I don’t respond. All I can do is imagine him with Eve, kissing and making lóve to her, giving her all the things he used to give me. I can see their writhing bodies in my mind’s eye, tɑngling the sheets of the Alpha’s bdd. It makes me feel sick to my stomach to know my husband was with the other woman mere hours ago, how does he even have the energy to use me this way when Eve was pleasuring him all night long? *** My husband seeks nothing but to claim me as roughly and thoroughly as he possibly can - and remind me of my proper place. This is what I have to look forward to: a lifetime of pain… unless I finally do what I’ve been planning over the last few months, and ask Ethan for a divorce.I didn’t even know it was possible for an omega to leave an Alpha until recently. Legally, we have almost no rights, but I could request a divorce. Now it is the time. *** Ethan and Jane were childhood sweethearts. However, he is alpha and she is omega. It was almost impossible for them to be fated mate. Ethan did not give up but chose Jane to be his wife and luna. But Fate sure knows how to run with a bit. This young couple messes up their first marriage by lack of trust. Divorce is easy. But what about finding out you were pregnant after divorce?What if you had quadruplets?

เลย์ ... ชายหนุ่มสายบันเทิงเริงสวาทสุดเจ้าชู้ หนุ่มหล่อผู้ชอบเซ็กส์สายสวิงเป็นชีวิต จนทำให้ในทุกๆวันของชีวิต อยู่บนเตียงกับหญิงสาวและดื่มเหล้าซะส่วนใหญ่ การที่จะมีเซ็กส์กับผู้หญิงแค่คนเดียว ถือเป็นเรื่องที่เป็นไปไม่ได้สำหรับเขา “คิดว่าพี่หยุดได้แบบนั้นเหรอ? คิดผิดหรือเปล่า” เลย์เอ่ย “พี่เลย์...” “พี่ไม่อยากมีปัญหากับพี่ชายเธอหรอกนะ” เลย์เอ่ย “หนูจะไม่บอกใครก็ได้ค่ะ..” “หึ!!!”

I looked at the naked stranger lying asleep beside me. Lightning flickered, illuminating his muscular body only in glimpses. He was covered in mud and blood, and though in human form now, he still looked wild and monstrous. I’d never found myself lying beside any naked man before in my life. He pulled at my clothes, and I let him rip them off. The thunder came closer, booming right overhead. We kissed with a frantic passion and grasped at every inch of each other. One of the only normal human girls at the Werewolf Noble Academy, I was at the bottom of the social order from the start. But even worse than that, just about everyone at school picked on me for being fat. One day I slept with a stranger in an accident. He is the second prince of the werewolf world, and wants to marry me!

Izzy's life has been turned upside down. As the local high school freak, she's never really fit in before, but things have lately gotten worse. To top it all off, her mom decided to suddenly move them in with her Aunt Luna and Uncle Alpha at their so-called PACK. Everything changed when she met their triplet sons. There are secrets in this village. And Izzy is slowly realizing that things aren't quite as they seem. The more questions she asks, the more questions she has. As events unfold, can Izzy find out the truth about herself, the strange village, and the strange Triplets?

After I found my bf kissing his "childhood friend", I got drunk in a bar and my best friend ordered a skilled call boy for me. He was indeed skilled and crazy hot. I left cash and ran away the next morning. Later, I ran into the "call boy" in my classroom and found he's in fact my new Professor. Gradually, I realized there was something different about him... “You forgot something.” He gave me a grocery bag in front of everyone with a poker face.“What—” I began to ask, but he was already walking away. The other students in the room were staring at me questionably, wondering what he had just handed me. I glanced inside the bag and instantly shut it, feeling the blood draining from my body. It was the bra and money I had left at his place.

(Au Sequel de Enceinte et rejetée par mon compagnon alpha. Peut être lu seul.) Aujourd'hui, j'ai reçu mon premier baiser, de façon totalement imprévue, avec quelqu'un que je ne connaissais pas. Alors que je déambulais dans les couloirs de l'Académie des Métamorphes de Higala, un sentiment étrangement familier m'a soudainement saisie. Non loin de là, mon petit ami, Scott, était présent et, à ma grande surprise, il n'était pas seul. « Tu es tellement espiègle, Scott, » souriait légèrement la louve Sarah. « Uniquement pour toi, chérie, » répond-il, sa voix étant étouffée tandis que ses lèvres capturaient les siennes. À ce moment-là, je sens mon estomac se nouer. « Oh, Scott, arrête. Tu sais bien qu'on ne doit pas être vus ensemble. Que se passerait-il si ta copine nous découvrait ? » « Elle suit un cours. Elle n'est jamais en retard. Ne t'inquiète pas. » Mon cœur pèse lourd dans ma poitrine, mais un flux de colère et de ressentiment me traverse également. « Lila ? » haletait Scott, me regardant avec stupéfaction. « Qu'est-ce que tu— » Avant qu'il ne puisse finir sa phrase, je me tournai vers le gentleman à mes côtés, plaçant mes mains sur ses épaules et le tirant vers moi. Il se laissa faire, bien que ses yeux ne trahissaient que de la confusion. Je fermai les yeux très fort pour ne plus voir son visage. Puis, nos lèvres s'effleurèrent. Plus tard, en entrant dans ma classe, je l'ai vu... L'homme que j'avais embrassé quelques instants plus tôt dans le couloir. L'homme à qui j'avais donné mon premier baiser, était mon professeur.

Après des années de lutte contre l'infertilité et ayant été trahie par son compagnon, Ella décide enfin d'avoir un enfant seule. Cependant, tout tourne mal lorsqu'elle se fait inséminée par accident avec le sperme du milliardaire intimidant Dominic Sinclair. Sa vie est soudainement bouleversée lorsque la confusion est élucidée—d'autant plus que Sinclair n'est pas n'importe quel milliardaire, c'est aussi un loup-garou en pleine campagne pour devenir le Roi des Alphas ! Il ne va pas laisser n'importe qui porter son enfant. Ella pourra-t-elle le convaincre de la laisser accompagner son enfant grandir ? Pourquoi la regarde-t-il toujours comme si elle était son prochain repas ? C’est impossible qu’il soit attiré par une humaine, n'est-ce pas ?

When your ex, a hockey player, begged for your forgiveness in front of everyone, making a scene, You were both awkward and angry as the team erupted into a chorus of gossip. Just when you were speechless and didn’t know what to do, The famous hockey captain raised his voice and said, “Enough. She is mine.”

I'm Aurora, a commoner, an inferior bloodline. My parents taught me a lot of things growing up, but the most important one is never piss off a royal. They run the world, they make the rules, and they are brutal when they don’t get exactly what they want, especially an unmated commoner girl. Most royals fuck commoner girls for fun, knowing we couldn’t possibly fight back. Some of them do it to get their release and then kill them, leaving behind no chance for an heir that is a half-breed. I’ve never seen a commoner female return from the palace. There aren’t many of us left in my pack, but my alpha has managed to convince the royal warriors that there aren’t any unmated females in his pack and if there were, he would gladly hand them over I’m unmated, only a year and half away from turning twenty to feel my mate. I pray to Moon Goddess that I need the protection of a mate. Until that day, a tall, brute man walks into my house like he was invited in. I tremble while he grins. He is a Royal.

Piper a cessé de poursuivre son rêve et a travaillé comme serveuse pour élever le bébé abandonné de sa sœur. Un jour, elle est tombée sur son ex-prince, Nicholas, lors du jeu fou de choix de Luna. Nicholas : « Comment as-tu pu cacher ma petite fille ?! » Piper : « Pardon ? Elle n’est pas à toi ! » Nicholas : « Tu as eu un enfant avec quelqu’un d’autre juste après notre rupture ?! »