Story Critique Example

Angelo Ian Diano didn't expect he would survive being hit by a speeding car. He wanted to thank the heavens for suddenly sparing his life and giving him another chance to correct his mistakes. But when Angelo opened his eyes, he was suddenly greeted by a nerve-wracking situation. From being a man oozing with masculinity, he suddenly became a femme fatale, as if the heavens were conspiring against him to punish him for all the things he did in the past. To add to the situation, not only did Angelo possess a body of just any woman but a married woman. He didn't know whether to laugh or cry because of his circumstance. To make matters worse, he found out that the husband of the woman he had possessed is the very person he has hated to the bones. Let's take a look at his story and find out who will be the first to go crazy. Is it Angelo or the one reading this?

[WARNING: This story is a reverse harem and contains extremely explicit scenes. Read at your own risk.] Nikole Castellaneta is rich, stubborn, domineering, and a brat. Being an only daughter of a billionaire, she always gets what she wants. When her boyfriend cheated on her, she immediately got a new apple of the eye, Cross—her father's business consultant. She heard Cross doesn't have a penchant for virgins, and he never liked her. Little did he know, Nikole would do everything to bed him, by hook or crook. But her ultimate problem—she is inexperienced. Then she created a harem to enhance her sexuality. Nikole recruited Clive, a CEO of an architectural firm, and Julian, her bodyguard. She wants to learn the bedroom etiquette for Cross. Her best friend, Kaden, is totally against it. But she proceeds anyway. She hopes that her heart is ready, too. Because the consequences are unbearable to handle…

Jen Salas has always kept her head down, working hard to support her struggling family in the bustling town of Cebu. When she meets Jacques Almerino, a young billionaire who catches her eye, she's swept off her feet. Jacques is drawn to Jen's down-to-earth charm, but as he returns to Cebu for a vacation, he knows he can't let himself fall in love - he's too busy managing his family's vast business empire. Despite their differences, Jen and Jacques can't stay away from each other, and their romance seems perfect. But when Jacques' esoteric secret is revealed, it threatens to tear them apart. As Jen and Jacques struggle to find a way to be together, they must confront their deepest fears and desires. Will their love be lost forever, or can they find a way to overcome the obstacles that stand in their way? Disclaimer: This story is written in Taglish

When love is a sin, Ava Peony Lazarte is the sinner. Ava is a nineteen-year-old college student who is known for her beauty, wit, and respectable reputation. She is every guy's dream girl and every girl's insecurity. However, behind her alluring and almost perfect facade, no one knows about her scandalous secret; she is the billionaire's mistress. She knows her relationship with the CEO of Valderama corporation, Zachary Wolf Valderama, is wrong for so many reasons. He is twice her age, about to get married for the second time, and he is her friend's father. However, Ava has no plans of quitting her relationship with Zach because she loves him. She depends on him. And he's everything she got. Ava is a warrior of the painful tragedy most people call love. She is a true warrior; a wounded one. Read her story and discover how is it like to be the billionaire's illicit affair.

STORY WITH EXPLICIT/MATURE CONTENT [R18]: (FIND ME: A LOVE THROUGH ETERNITY SEQUEL) Hindi pinangarap minsan man ni Jenny sa buhay niya ang maging kabit pero nangyari parin iyon. Kaya naman hindi siya nagdalawang isip na lumayo upang makalimot nang malaman niya ang totoo. But life is full of surprises dahil muling nagtagpo ang landas nilang dalawa ni Jason. Si Jason, ang lalaking unang umangkin ng lahat ng kaya niyang ibigay, at sa pagkakataong ito aware si Jenny na ang desire niya para sa dating nobyo ay mas matindi, at ganoon rin naman ito sa kaniya. The reason why she is so ready to get burned. Masyadong malakas ang pangangailangan nila para sa isa’t-isa that can even happen kahit sa simpleng pagtatama lamang ng kanilang mga mata.

(Grant Saavedra's Story) Tanggap ni Kiara na isa siyang 'Single mother' pero hindi pala tanggap iyon ng kanyang anak. Naghahanap ng pagmamahal ng isang ama ang anak niyang si Kian, at isa lang ang nais nito maging daddy, walang iba kundi ang ex niyang si Grant! Paano niya matatanggihan ang kanyang anak kung pati si Grant ay nais din na maging ama para sa anak niya? Mahulog kaya ang damdamin niya sa binata na walang pinakita kundi pagmamahal sa kanilang mag ina? O masasaktan lang siya sa kasinungalingan na malalaman niya? Handa ba siyang sumugal at naisin na lumaban kung malaman niya ang tunay na dahilan sa pagbabalik ng binata sa buhay nila?

Sina Katrina Reign Mendez, Marco at Franco Hermosa ay magkakaibigan. Pero paano kung paglayuin sila ng tadhana dahil sa isang pangyayari? At paano, kung tadhana rin ang gagawa ng paraan para pagtagpuin silang muli? Mananatili pa rin kaya silang magkaibigan o mauuwi sa pag-iibigan? Sino kaya ang pipiliin ng dalaga kung sakali? Bata pa lang nangarap na si Katrina ng mala-fairytale love story na kung saan siya ang Prinsesa at pinagsisilbihan ng kaniyang Prinsipe. Pero wala pang happy ending ay magulo na agad ang love story ng dalaga. Naging magulo ang buhay niya simula nang magtagpo ang landas nila ng kambal na sina Marco at Franco Hermosa. Kababata niya ang kambal pero batid niyang hindi siya magkakagusto isa man sa kanila dahil bukod sa kaibigan niya ang mga ito, isa lang din naman siyang hamak na anak ng mayordoma sa mansion ng mga binata. Pero bakit kabaliktaran yata ang lahat? Naging mapaglaro ang tadhana dahil sa kambal pa tumibok ang kaniyang puso. Hindi niya alam na ang kambal pa ang magpapagulo sa tahimik niyang mundo. Hindi alam ng dalaga na magkakagusto siya sa magkapatid kahit na magkaiba ito ng ugali. At lalong hindi niya maintindihan na sa kabila ng hindi magandang katangian ni Franco ay nahulog pa rin ang loob niya rito. Samantalang kabaliktaran naman ito ni Marco na mabait, maginoo, at maalalahanin. Lahat na yata ng magandang katangian ay na kay Marco na. Pero bakit pakiramdam ng dalaga may kulang pa? Paano niya kaya iiwasan ang kambal kung sila naman ang panay na lumalapit? At paano niya sasabihin na isa lang ang gusto niya kung dalawa ang nagpapagulo sa mundo niya? Sino kaya ang mas matimbang sa puso niya? The arrogant Franco or the good man Marco?

BOOK #2 :OLIVIA and TRISTAN STORY Akala ni Olivia ay perpekto ang relasyon nila ni Tristan, pero akala lang pala niya. Sa gitna ng kanyang kasikatan, bigla itong nagpakalat ng malaswa niyang larawan sa internet na naging dahilan ng pagbagsak ng kanyang karera sa ngalan ng pagsunod nito sa ina nito upang magpakasal sa iba. Nagpakalayo-layo siya, ngunit hinanap siya ni Tristan hanggang sa matagpuan siya nito ilang taon pagkatapos niyang mawala. --- "Olivia, pwede bang kalimutan na natin ang nangyari? Ilang taon na ang nakalipas." Tumaas ang sulok ng kaniyang labinat ngumiti. "Kalimutan? Kahit na mamatay ako, hinding-hindi kita patatawarin tandaan mo yan." Magagawa kayang palambutin muli ni Tristan ang naging batong puso ni Olivia?

Paano kung ang Supremong hinahangaan at iniibig ng lahat ay may itim na lihim na kailan man ay hindi pa nabubunyag? Tapos aksidente mo itong nalaman at natuklasan? Ito ngayon ang nangyari kay Acey Marie Fuentes. Ang babaeng nakatulaklas sa sekreto ni Damon Louis Grando, o kilala bilang “Sumpremo” sa kilalang Unibersidad. Maraming tanong ang pumapasok sa isipan ni Acey ngunit walang sagot— walang sumasagot. Marahil hindi niya alam ang gagawin niya sa araw na madamay ang buong angkan niya. Ngunit, sa alang-alang ng pag-ibig at pagmamahal ay gagawin niya ang lahat na alam niyang tama. Will Acey shout it loud? Or keep it self? Then, what's next? What's the secret? Come and join, and be part of their story titled THE SUPREME DARK SECRET, reveal the hidden truth.

The once cheerful Neneth became sad when her beloved father was imprisoned for a crime he didn't commit.ang lungkot ay naging galit at puot ng malaman niyang ang matalik niyang kaibigan at kababatang si Dimitro ang dahilan kung bakit nakulong ang kanyang ama.until she grew up and became a full-fledged young woman,she still carried those feelings for Dimitro.her anger and hatred towards her childhood friend could not be erased from her heart.mawawala lamang ang galit at puot niya kay Dimitro kung makapaghihiganti siya dito.gagawin niya ang lahat maibalik lamang ang lahat ng parusa kay dimitro.but the anger and resentment she feels towards for Dimitro gradually disappears and replaced by love as they piece together the events of the past. WARNING:SPG This story contains violent and offensive language and scenes.if you are under the age of eighteen,strict parental guidance is required.