Story Critique Example

Bretta Margareth Barreto experienced an assault at the age of fifteen. She wanted to fight back and shout for help, but she can’t do it. Lore threatened her if she will scream and fight back, she won’t be able to see her younger sister. There’s nothing she can do during the night she was being harass. So, she chose not to fight back and scream.She let Lore to do what he want and just go with the flow. She cried while doing those things that destroy her purity during her young age. After what happened on that night, Bretta promise to herself that she won’t trust boys that easily. But that promise got broken when a special boy came to her life.Cyrus made her feel special. Accepted her flaws, shameful experienced, and love her. Bretta love him so much as Cyrus love her too. They thought that their love towards each other can conquer everything. But that thought change everything when something bad happened. Will their love prevail or will that be the end of their love story?

READ AT YOUR OWN RISK!!! WARNING: MATURED CONTENT. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED! (Red Gabrielle Story) Huminto saglit sa pagtibok ng puso ni Yuri ng magkasalubong ang kanilang mata ni Red- ang lalaking kay dilim at kay lalim tumingin. Takbo... iyon ang babala ng kanyang utak- ngunit paano siya makakawala sa mala-bakal nitong mga bisig gayong sa tuwing sinusubukan niyang lumayo ay ibinabalik siya nito sa bisig nito? TRAPPED SERIES#4. Trapped Series Titles ⬇️ 1.Trapped with him (Alaric) COMPLETED 2.The lonely billionaire and his maid. (Damon) COMPLETED 3. His intention (Zandro) COMPLETED 4.Trapped in his wrath (Red) COMPLETED 5.Broken hearts and promises (Miguel)ONGOING 6. The hidden wife tears (Nickolas) SOON 7. The billionaire's trick (Liam) SOON 8.His dangerous trap. (Tres) SOON 9.Forbidden desire (Jack) SOON 10.The billionaire's secret love (Wendell) SOON Genre: ROMANCE/DARK ROMANCE/STEAMY READ AT YOUR OWN RISK!!!!

Upang maitaguyod ang pangangailangan nilang mag-ina, lahat ng paraan ay ginawa ni Anna nang pumasok siya sa mundong hindi niya nakasanayan—ang Manila. Lahat ng klase ng raket ay pinasok niya—basta marangal at kikita siya rito. Hindi iniinda ang pagod dahil ang mahalaga lamang sa kaniya ay matugunan ang pangangailangan nila ng anak, lalo't single mom siya at wala siyang ibang aasahan kundi ang sarili lamang niya. Subalit ang pagiging ina niya'y sinubok nang isang araw ma dengue ang kaniyang anak at kailangan niya ng malaking pera. Isang kaibigan ang nagbigay ng raket sa kaniya na may malaking suweldo. Ang hindi niya aakalain ay dahil sa raket na iyon ay muli silang magkikita ng lalaking iniibig niya. Si Brett Valle. Ang ama ng kaniyang anak. This story is book two of Still Holding On.

An arrange marriage kind of love story. Both with big differences from each other. One live with peace and doesn't like chaos but the other one finds comfort in chaos. Anthony Vasquez a mafia boss who disguise himself as a businessman and a doctor. Flirty but professional, depends on what professionalism you want. Aside from his looks, his humor is also what girls around him like about him. Doctor sa umaga, mafia boss sa gabi, depende pa kung may pasyente kasi aside sa kumikitil siya ng buhay, nanggagamot din siya ng buhay. His priorities is with both with a little bit of partying and having sex with plenty of women who will offer themselves to him. His life was fun regardless of what his other personality do for a living, he's still having fun not until he was arranged marriage by his parents to a woman names Emily Suarez. A doctor of psychology who's a complete opposite of him. Their love story is not the romantic one but rather the fun and dangerous kind.

Warning for 18+ old reader and open minded readers only , you were about to read a kinky author writing a love story it was suppose to be a romance with sweet nothings but yeah I was just a warning anyway read it wisely enjoy. Allyza Shane Chu a strong woman with soft heart. Her father was diagnosed with Kidney failure and needs to be treated right away, she can't let her father die but she needs amount that she can't even afford. Humingi sya ng tulong sa tita niya but didn't help her. Her aunt despise her existence because sinisisi sya ng tita nya kung ba't namatay ang mama nya dahil sya ang pinili ng papa niyang iligtas nung pinanganak siya. She did cry when her aunt didn't help she has nowhere to run, she cried on the church but an old woman approach her and offered her a job. And The Job is to be her Son's Baby MAKER.

Celene Ramos never planned to cross paths with Luther Montefalco — the ruthless billionaire CEO feared by everyone in the corporate world. She only wanted to prove herself, to work hard and survive the chaos of the city. But one stormy night changed everything. When Luther offered her a ride home under the rain, he unknowingly opened a door he could never close again. Beneath his cold control hides a man consumed by desire — dangerous, possessive, and drawn to Celene in ways he can’t explain. And no matter how hard she tries to stay away, she finds herself falling into his world of power, secrets, and forbidden passion. As their lives intertwine, lines blur between love and obsession, pleasure and pain. He wants to protect her. He wants to own her. But loving a man like Luther Montefalco might come with the greatest price — her heart, her freedom, and everything she thought she knew about herself. A story of desire that burns, love that wounds, and a connection neither of them can escape — even if it leads to ruin.

Akala ni Ivory, pag nag-file siya ng annulment kay Levi, matatahimik na ang buhay niya. Pero mali siya. Sa mundo nilang tatlo, siya ang naging kontrabida. Si  Franchesca ang tunay na mahal ng asawa niya at siya ay panakip-butas lamang, substitute noong mga panahong wasak na wasak ang puso ni Levi dahil sa pag-alis ng ex-girlfriend nito. Kung ihahambing niya sa mga kwentong nabasa niya: dapat siyang mabaliw sa selos, apihin ng lahat, at iwan nang luhaan.  Pero sorry sila. Nasa reyalidad siya ngayon.  Hindi siya papayag maging extra sa love story ng iba. Hindi siya ang iiyak sa gilid habang ang asawa niya at ang babae nito ay naghahalikan sa gitna. This time, siya ang magdidikta ng kapalaran niya at sisimulan niya sa annulment. "Baliw ako? Hindi. Nagising lang ako sa katotohanang matagal na akong ginawang tanga."

WARNING: R[18]: STORY WITH EXTREMELY EXPLICIT/MATURE CONTENT Dahil bawal ang kanilang pagmamahalan naisipan nina Vincent at Isla na magpakasal ng lihim upang hindi na magkalayo kailanman. Pero sa isang hindi inaasahang pagkakataon ay naganap ang isang insidente na kahit sa panaginip ay hindi nila inasahang pwede pa lang mangyari. Gamit ang pera nito ay binayaran ng ina ni Vincent ang ama ni Isla upang ilayo ang dalaga sa binata isang araw bago ang kanilang kasal. Gumuho ang mundo ni Isla dahil sa nangyari. Pero muli silang nagkita ni Vincent, at kahit suklam ito sa kaniya sa hindi niya malaman na kadahilanan ay sinabi sa kaniya ng binata na sa ayaw at sa gusto niya ay kailangan niya itong pakasalan, kung hindi ay mawawala sa kaniya si Matthew, ang kanilang anak.

There was a nerd that is bullied by everyone, keeps on transferring because of unexplainable happenings, a weird, mysterious and creepy one. She's famous! So famous that every pair of eyes would look at her. A disgusting look. But no one knows her real identity. No one. Like who would want to know her if she's a nerd, a useless ugly nerd? But behind those masks... She's a goddess. A goddess that can make you fall in just a blink of an eye. A goddess that will captivate your heart and soul. A goddess that has so many untold story and secrets. A goddess that will make your life a living nightmare. She's fierce Cold as ice Emotionless She's Heartless So don't you dare try to push her limits if you don't want to taste hell. Because she, herself, is the living hell. And finally the time has come. She was transferred to the school where magics exists. Magiczard Academy Her land of birth. Insanity! Like who will believe that magics exists? Who? But what if ... She finds out that she's not just an ordinary? But extremely extraordinary?

Isla Carter is a fearless journalist known for exposing truths powerful men would rather keep buried. Sebastian Romano is one of those men—an untouchable mafia boss whose influence hides behind wealth, silence, and control. When Isla’s investigation pulls her dangerously close to Sebastian’s world, their connection becomes unavoidable. What begins as watchful distance turns into charged conversations, careful restraint, and a growing tension neither of them planned. Isla knows better than to trust a man like him—especially when the truth about him is exactly what could destroy him. When she finally publishes the story that exposes Sebastian, it should have ended everything. Instead, it changes them. As danger closes in and lines blur between duty and desire, Sebastian is forced to choose between power and honesty, while Isla must face the cost of loving a man she once meant to bring down. Set against a world of secrets, control, and quiet confessions, Byline of My Heart is a slow-burn romance about choosing truth—even when it risks the heart—and discovering that the most dangerous love is the one that refuses to cage you.